maia i am going to DIE first off i found 2 typos that i can think of right now!
“I thought color was distracting,” Jongin says.
“It is,” Jongin replied. “But just this once, it made things a little clearer.” i believe that is supposed to be Yixing!
as Yixing takes photographs of the way Jongin’s hipbones just out when Yixing drags a fingers across the skin there and i think you meant jut?
NOW THE STORY i am really really bad at expressing my feelings in words especially online but this was just really beautiful above all else. some people think writing this much is overkill but with you, it never is. to me, there is always something in every scene that makes it worth all the words.
i like how their relationship developed naturally and not rushed the way they tend to be written sometimes, it just felt like over the course of the fic the love just fell together instead of popping out of nowhere.
i really loved all the mentions of his grandmother and the scenes with his grandmother because they showed a little bit of yixing that no one else knew, since it felt like his grandmother really knew him more than anyone else.
there are 10239481024 other things i could say but i just really loved this and i think that's the best i can say ;w;
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Date: 2012-09-23 01:10 am (UTC)first off i found 2 typos that i can think of right now!
“I thought color was distracting,” Jongin says.
“It is,” Jongin replied. “But just this once, it made things a little clearer.”
i believe that is supposed to be Yixing!
as Yixing takes photographs of the way Jongin’s hipbones just out when Yixing drags a fingers across the skin there
and i think you meant jut?
NOW THE STORY
i am really really bad at expressing my feelings in words especially online but this was just really beautiful above all else. some people think writing this much is overkill but with you, it never is. to me, there is always something in every scene that makes it worth all the words.
i like how their relationship developed naturally and not rushed the way they tend to be written sometimes, it just felt like over the course of the fic the love just fell together instead of popping out of nowhere.
i really loved all the mentions of his grandmother and the scenes with his grandmother because they showed a little bit of yixing that no one else knew, since it felt like his grandmother really knew him more than anyone else.
there are 10239481024 other things i could say but i just really loved this and i think that's the best i can say ;w;