http://jejun.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] jejun.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] maayacolabackup 2012-07-02 04:40 am (UTC)

LOVED IT!!!!!! :D

Oh btw are there a couple of errors?
Part one:

Wu Fan’s will power is the stone, and he stars he proverb because he won’t forget it ->he stars the proverb?

Part three:
Wu Fan glances up to ask Yixing a question, but Yixing is striping in the middle of the room before Wu Fan has time to process what’s happening and look away.-> stripping?

Figures you’d be brooding,” Yixing says, and Wu Fan jumps at the sound of his voice. “If he fans could see that face.”-> the fans?

Lu Han appears at his right, hands linked behind his back, and eyes watching the same sight as Wu Fan. “How go the experiments?” Lu Han asks lightly, and Wu Fan wonders how much Lu Han knows.-> how did the experiments go?

I think your writing is fabulous and you should write more!!!!! Also LOL at chanyeol and tao making fun of kris XD

And um ot but you write pin!?!????? I will so have to read them all one day

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