You know, at first I thought this would be kind of light hearted, kind of like this/these parts: But then Yixing wakes him up the first morning they spend in the dorm together by singing ‘Peking Opera’ style at the top of his lungs to the tune of the rice cooker at the ungodly hour of six in the morning, and Wu Fan thinks he may have made a terrible error in judgment...Yixing, whose hair is pulled away from his face with a ponytail holder, and whose shoulder is smooth and white under the florescent kitchen light where it’s bared by his loose-necked shirt, starts beat boxing, puffing out his cheeks as he serves himself a bowl of rice, and looks up at Wu Fan with a dangerous smile...“As in, I’m just going to do all the horrible things I usually do, and then when I don’t do them, it’ll be a pleasant surprise.” He makes the sound of a cymbal, like a triumphant finish to his beat boxing routine. “Horrible fact number one: I wake up really early and am never quiet about it.” (He really does have good reasoning tbh).
But then I'm reading this, and it's just. Not. And it's perfect. The way you describe Kris, his tendencies, his feelings, his everything, it's exactly like what I would have imagined; he's real and he's not completely like the Kris on stage and in interviews. Normally, I think characters are kind of stupid if they haven't figured out their feelings, but your Kris is kind of innocent in a way, and I really love how it doesn't really drag on, and yet kind of does at the same time because you can actually get a feeling of him and Yixing.
Yixing was also wonderful, by the way. He's one of the least popular members, but he definitely has a special thing about him that not a lot of people notice until later on. I firstly loved his appearance, because he looked sort of innocent, but in a way different than Lu Han's innocence. Then his personality came through in different ways, like in interviews even though- perfectly described in his fic by the way, his zombie appearance -and well yeah. I have no idea what I'm talking about anymore. I love your Yixing because he's mysterious, that persona fits him really well and you wrote him really well.
Basically, I loved all of your characterizations. I really liked the rest of the member's personalities too. Like Jongdae: “I meant your dancing,” Jongdae says I love snarky!Jongdae :)
OH! I forgot something OTL. This was also the first time that I read a sex scene while I felt really content. All the background and everything before the sex (which tbh I was waiting for .__.) gave me this really soft, content feeling haha. I've never really been that relaxed before (when reading porn).
This was really wonderful, it'll definitely be one of my favorite fics of this fandom. I hope you'll continue writing fics like this :)
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But then I'm reading this, and it's just. Not. And it's perfect. The way you describe Kris, his tendencies, his feelings, his everything, it's exactly like what I would have imagined; he's real and he's not completely like the Kris on stage and in interviews. Normally, I think characters are kind of stupid if they haven't figured out their feelings, but your Kris is kind of innocent in a way, and I really love how it doesn't really drag on, and yet kind of does at the same time because you can actually get a feeling of him and Yixing.
Yixing was also wonderful, by the way. He's one of the least popular members, but he definitely has a special thing about him that not a lot of people notice until later on. I firstly loved his appearance, because he looked sort of innocent, but in a way different than Lu Han's innocence. Then his personality came through in different ways, like in interviews even though- perfectly described in his fic by the way, his zombie appearance -and well yeah. I have no idea what I'm talking about anymore. I love your Yixing because he's mysterious, that persona fits him really well and you wrote him really well.
Basically, I loved all of your characterizations. I really liked the rest of the member's personalities too. Like Jongdae: “I meant your dancing,” Jongdae says I love snarky!Jongdae :)
OH! I forgot something OTL. This was also the first time that I read a sex scene while I felt really content. All the background and everything before the sex (which tbh I was waiting for .__.) gave me this really soft, content feeling haha. I've never really been that relaxed before (when reading porn).
This was really wonderful, it'll definitely be one of my favorite fics of this fandom. I hope you'll continue writing fics like this :)